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Friday, February 6, 2015

02.06 - Outlines: Tie-Backs and Transitions

At the beginning of class, we reviewed key components of the midterms and then everyone had a chance to review comments and grades on their midterm (this had been displaced by our multiple snow days).

Next, everyone responded to the following writing prompt:

For The Road theme and message essay, you will be assessed on your thesis and claims, transitions, and quote integration.

Which waffles ingredients did you say these elements represent?

What does this tell you about how you should use these in your essay?


We discussed these responses and then moved into looking at how to write tie-back and transition sentences to help with the flow of the essay. These sentences are also included as part of the work on the essay outline. To practice, we used the Lion King example for the essay outline and wrote a tie-back sentence which connected a paragraph looking at Mufasa's leadership back to the thesis about responsibility as a leader's most important trait. Then, everyone wrote a transition sentence moving from the Mufasa paragraph (as an example of a good leader) to the Scar paragraph (as an example of a bad leader).

Examples from class are included below

Tie-Back:

Mufasa knew his responsibilities so he was a good leader.

Mufasa takes responsibility for his actions and because of this he knows exactly what it takes to be a good and just leader.

Through his actions, Mufasa shows how being responsible and doing his duty as a king and father makes him a good and just leader.


Transition:

While Mufasa is a model of an ideal, responsible leader, Scar show how terrible it is to have an irresponsible leader.

Mufasa's brother Scar, however, is the opposite of Mufasa, because he doesn't take responsibility for what he does.

Unfortunately, not everyone possesses the same qualities of leadership of Mufasa.


Everyone then had the rest of the period to work on building evidence for their essays as well as writing tie-back and transition sentences.



Homework:

Complete your outline for The Road (thesis, claims, evidence, tie-back sentences, and transition sentences)

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